Wearable Computer

4 years ago, I purchased a wearable computer because I was worried about my sleep habit. Quite often, a sudden feeling of sleepness struck me. Especially, after eating lunch, almost fainted sometimes.

The wearable computer that I got can assess how many hours I sleep. This visualized method tells me the situation of how well I spend during nights. Harnessing for months, I found what I needed was the longer sleeping hours. Things are simple.

And then, I got weighed at the time I quit my job because of the stress. To slove this issue, I decided to go to the personal gym. During this period, my wearable computer helped a lot because this device tells me many information including footsteps, comsumed calories and heartbeats.

Due to farbulous teaching and my gadget, my weigh went down dramatically. It was 15 kgs that I had lost, but 5kgs gained from October last year.

As time went on, the dispaly was unfunctional, the sensor is still alive though. I have come to think that the time was coming to renew the device. Finally the new one arrived yesterday.

Feeling renewal drives me to act more. I wish this would be another starting point to my success.

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＜日本語訳＞by Google Translation

4年前、睡眠習慣が心配だったのでウェアラブル コンピューターを購入しました。突然眠気を感じることがよくありました。特に昼食を食べた後は、気を失いそうになることもありました。

私が購入したウェアラブル コンピューターは、睡眠時間を評価できます。この視覚化された方法で、夜間の過ごし方の状態がわかります。何ヶ月も試した結果、必要なのは睡眠時間を長くすることだとわかりました。物事は簡単です。

そして、ストレスのために仕事を辞めた時に体重を測りました。この問題を解決するために、パーソナル ジムに通うことにしました。この期間中、ウェアラブル コンピューターは歩数、消費カロリー、心拍数など多くの情報を教えてくれるので、とても役に立ちました。

素晴らしい指導とガジェットのおかげで、体重は劇的に減りました。15kg減ったのですが、昨年の10月から5kg増えました。

時間が経つにつれて、ディスプレイは機能しなくなりましたが、センサーはまだ動いています。そろそろデバイスを新しくする時期が来ていると思うようになりました。ようやく昨日新しいものが届きました。

新しくなったという実感が私をさらに行動へと駆り立てます。これが私の成功への新たな出発点になればと思います。

 

＊ChatGTPによる添削

1. "sleep habit" → "sleep habits"（複数形の方が自然）
2. "a sudden feeling of sleep struck me" → "a sudden feeling of sleepiness would strike me"（時制の一致と自然な表現）
3. "almost fainted sometimes" → "I would almost faint sometimes"（主語の明確化）
4. "visualized method tells me the situation of how well I spend during nights" → "visualization shows me how well I sleep at night"（自然な表現）
5. "Harnessing for months" → "Using it for months"（適切な動詞）
6. "longer sleeping hours" → "longer sleep"（自然な表現）
7. "got weighed" → "weighed myself"（能動態）
8. "tells me many information" → "gives me a lot of information"（自然な表現と単数・複数の一致）
9. "my weigh went down" → "my weight went down"（スペルミス）
10. "was unfunctional" → "became non-functional"（適切な形容詞）
11. "drives me to act more" → "motivates me to be more active"（自然な表現)

＊ChatGTPによる模範解答

Four years ago, I purchased a wearable computer because I was worried about my sleep habits. Quite often, a sudden feeling of sleepiness would strike me. Especially after eating lunch, I would almost faint sometimes.

The wearable computer that I got can assess how many hours I sleep. This visualization shows me how well I sleep at night. Using it for months, I found that what I needed was longer sleep. Things are simple.

Then, I weighed myself when I quit my job because of stress. To solve this issue, I decided to go to a personal gym. During this period, my wearable computer helped a lot because this device gives me a lot of information including steps taken, calories burned, and heart rate.

Due to the fabulous training and my gadget, my weight went down dramatically. I lost 15 kg, but gained 5 kg back from October last year.

As time went on, the display became non-functional, though the sensor is still working. I have come to think that it was time to renew the device. Finally, the new one arrived yesterday.

Feeling renewed motivates me to be more active. I hope this will be another starting point to my success.

＊所感

昨日よりはマシになったかな。目標としては指摘の個数が10個を切るようにしたいところ。

今日で1週間は継続した。とりあえず継続命で取り組んでみようと思う。